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I pray to a God I have never seen,
who lives in a world that has never been,
to save my heart that has never felt,
from eternity's failures, eternity's guilt.

My feet step on grounds no men stepped before,
my lips taste the poison, bitter and sore,
yet it does not kill me,
does that mean,
that I am immortal,
or that I've never been?

I pray to a God that may not exist,
while the iron shackle tears up my wrist,
to tell me the difference of being and not,
to show me the memories that I forgot.

My mind flies to places nobody has reached,
to learn that the stars are nothing but bleached,
spots on the dark, they're not even light,
I think that's 'cause real light brings nothing but fright:
It's bound to discover
all crimes, neatly covered.

I pray to a God because maybe he is,
unlike me and the world,
in them I miss
reality,
specialty,
something to reach.
something written some time ago that fell out of the pocket of one of my trousers xD
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jkemeny Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I like this. I have often had the same thoughts.
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011   General Artist
Nice poem; it captures the existential panic in us all. But Pascal's wager is not a good philosophy.
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heartbrake18 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011
i like your style..good job man!
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Only-L Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011   Writer
:bow:
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GruesseVonDerOrion Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010   Writer
Hmm i like it
Why have you switched the topics in some sections?
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Only-L Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010   Writer
switching topics? Hm.. I wouldn't call it switching topics. This piece isn't such a clear one, and in a way, everything's connected. I guess that might not be easy to see, but neither is it necessary to enjoy the poem :)
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GruesseVonDerOrion Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2010   Writer
But i think when you cut this connections in clear topics also the hill billys would understand the poem a bit and in this century our main part in the social networks is to give some reproduction to make the community a bit smarter
I´m German, my Englisch isn´t good^^
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Only-L Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010   Writer
Warum reden wir dann nicht deutsch? :) Ich bin aus Österreich, also hätt ich keine argen Probleme damit xD
könntest du mir das was du vorher auf englisch geschrieben hast, vielleicht nochmal auf deutsch schreiben? Ich versteh grad nicht alles, was du damit sagen willst X'D
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GruesseVonDerOrion Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010   Writer
Wenn du diese Verknüpfungen untereinander pro Strophe trennen würdest um sozusagen reine Strophen mit einem Thema daraus zu machen wäre das Gedicht offensichtlicher und auch das tittenversessene Proletentum würde das Gedicht verstehen und irgendwas hab ich noch geschrieben... ah das es in dieser Zeit der Dummheit etc. die Aufgabe von schlaueren Menschen ist die Reproduktion tiefgreifender Gedanken für die Menschheit anzutreiben.
Müsste so stimmen, ich bin gerade verkattert.
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Only-L Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010   Writer
Ha, noch ein verkaterter xD Mir geht's jetzt zum Glück schon langsam besser ^^
Hm... ich weiß nicht, ob ich diese Aufgabe annehmen will xD Alles in allem schreib ich doch eher für Leute, die meine Sachen auch kapieren können wenn sie mal schwerer verdaulich sind (mit Ausnahmen). Oder die zumindest das Zusammenspiel der Worte genießen können, wenns am Verständnis mal hapert, seis jetzt weil ich so deppert schreib, seis weil sie so deppert denken XD
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GruesseVonDerOrion Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010   Writer
Naja, bloß das Problem ist das es mit der Einstellung in der nächsten Generation nicht mehr soviele Leute geben wird.
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unsoundworld Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010
This is very wierd. I swear i just found ur poem, but i just uploaded an old poem called existence that has some coincidental parallels.
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DanaJinx Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2010
cool
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TaintedMoonlight Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010
It's beautiful! :la:
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Ebony-Tiger Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010  Student General Artist
Haha, glad you found it again. I love this.
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ilovepotatoechips Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Amazing...
Inspired now...
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arrowzee Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
...I've written a poem with the same title... Not exactly the same concept, though. And certainly not as good. I didn't give it much thought, or even bother improving anyting...I just wrote it in one go. This, however, is an amazing poem.
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YunaSan Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2010
Thank you for the llama!
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TTFAA Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written. You're quite the writer!
xD Also, I find myself thinking about the themes mentioned in this poem a lot of the time.
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MikeHaff Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010
Nicely written and eloquently stated without any preachy tone.
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Glorpsnub Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
:D
I think this poem brings to light the things people think of
and are too afraid to say :]
Ah! It's great! fave!!
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Only-L Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2010   Writer
thanks <3 =D
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Glorpsnub Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
No prob, it's great!!
I've been having internal conflicts about the subject and its great to know I'm not alone on this haha
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WormandaDuck Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010  Student Writer
Well written!
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xoxoarieta Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010
this is really pretty:)
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Snow-love Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010
Reallly beautiful ... But somehow i felt a presence of loneliness . - [ but no offence ! (: ]
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xByDefault Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010
Beautiful
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wow that is really really good.
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Felfyron Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010
This is really well written. I just happened to swing by your page again and see it up front. Glad you have it there, or I might have missed it!
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instanttomen Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2010
exceptionally beautiful
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yvonne3694 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I must say, I really like the subtle rhyming and the way it just works so extremely well in the piece. It doesn't hinder the story at all, and in fact, it boosts the pleasure in reading each line quite a lot. :)
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LAParker13 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2010  Student Writer
Your poetry is absolutely beautiful. It made me remember why it is that I write to convey my own emotions.
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LolaMontserrat Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010
Simply beautiful.
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I really liked this :) It made me smile and think. It also created some ideas of my own. Really nice piece of work :D I want to see more please
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Only-L Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010   Writer
thanks =D There is more, all around my gallery ^^
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rin-fang Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
I like it. It has a nice cadence to it, and evokes a wide variety of emotions. Good job!
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losttherace Featured By Owner May 29, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Brilliant! :glomp:
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cappicinoromance Featured By Owner May 28, 2010   General Artist
one word: epic
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Only-L Featured By Owner May 29, 2010   Writer
thanks ^^
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cappicinoromance Featured By Owner May 29, 2010   General Artist
no problem it was a really good piece of lit
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Sierdas Featured By Owner May 24, 2010
A nice one :) Faved.
I'd really enjoy you checking out some of my stuff, IF you spoke my language ;)
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Only-L Featured By Owner May 24, 2010   Writer
uh, sorry ^^; I do speak some languages, but, sadly, Polish isn't one of them yet ^^; thanks for the fav though =D
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Sierdas Featured By Owner May 25, 2010
Hah, no problem ;)
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nemesis-wolf Featured By Owner May 13, 2010
luv it.... <3
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RuelfA Featured By Owner May 9, 2010   Writer
Oh hi.. I just noticed this has been accepted as a favourite Here

thought I'd inform you:)
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Only-L Featured By Owner May 9, 2010   Writer
thanks ^^
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gabtrix Featured By Owner May 8, 2010
OMGosh~! :iconIcanbeliveItplz: is sooo beauty! :heart:

i love it!!♥ :la:
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TheMaidenInBlack Featured By Owner May 7, 2010
Very lovely, the rhythm in this is just... great. :) And the message, too.
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valzart Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Professional General Artist
Aww this is wonderful poetry sweetheART fave ;} happy hippy hugglez
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